Write two second postings. Place classmate’s first and last name at the top of each posting.

Paragraph

First, include a classmate’s paragraph.

Place a space between a classmate’s paragraph and your paragraph.

In your own paragraph, respond to the following questions:

Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence that is assertive and specific? Does the topic sentence organize the sentences that follow it in the paragraph.
Are sources separately introduced and summarized with a one-or-two sentence summary?

Are sources placed in conversation with each other?

Are three quotations included?

Are quotations well-edited, and well-integrated?
Are quotations introduced with signal phrases? Does the paragraph include correct MLA documentation with signal phrases, in-text citations, and Works Cited?
Note strengths and suggest improvements.
Include two specific points in readings included in this discussion and explain how they are demonstrated in classmate’s paragraph or how they could improve a classmate’s paragraph. Include the title and page number of reading.
Write a 200-word paragraph for each classmate.

classmate 1 post

Schools can be the reason families remain in poverty. Writer Jonathan Kozol writes about his experience as an educator in the public school Fremont high school located in Los Angeles. Kozol describes in great detail what it was like to be a teacher in the highschool. Kozol recalls the very unsafe sanitation and terrible work environment that despite being in several repost seemed to never to solved. “The rats observed by children in their elementary schools proliferate at Fremont high school report” (kozol, 773). Kozol Also mentions how grueling the days were for students and teachers due to the lack of air conditioning. “Some of the classrooms do not have air conditioning so that students becomes red-faced and unable to concentrate during the extreme heat of summer” (Kozol, 773). Kozol Talks about some of his interactions with students and their unconformities with the school. Kozol recalls some of his students wanting to be able to go to college and wanting to take Ap classes, but due to lack of resources and lack of available classes, these students are forced to take classes that seem to aport very little to their academic Success such as “sewing” or “hair styling”. Students even recalls always having substitute teachers in their classes, the school could not get enough staff for the classes they had enrolled so every students vividly recalls always having substitutes in their classes, which needless to say results In a bad quality class with less to learn. Fremont highschool like most public highschool In lower socioeconomic neighborhoods, end up with many of their students frustrated and leaving the school In one instance Kozol talks about one his interactions with a student named Mireya, who has big dreams of being able to go to college and accomplishing her dreams. Mireya was heart broken when she figured out she would not be able to take Ap clases but instead a hair dressing class. “I don’t want to take hair-dressing. I did not need sewing either. I knew how to sew. My mother is a seamstress in a factory. I’m trying to go to college. I don’t need to sew to go to college. My mother sews. I hoped for something else.” (Kozol 775). Students with big plans and big dreams get stopped by the lack of opportunities some public schools don’t have. The public school system creates a system where the poor remain poor and remain without opportunity to become better and accomplish their dreams. Kozol talks about a shocking conversation he witnessed between mireya and another student, where Mireya received some “advice” regarding her situation. “Your ghetto said fortino unrelentingly to Her. “So sew!” “. (Kozol 775). Lack of opportunities make students lose hope, and statistically these students end very close to the socioeconomic place of their parents, which create a viscous cycle of poverty and lack of opportunities.

When reading the “synthesizing sources, Purdue writing lab” I saw very valuable information that I could apply to the reading I was going to do. I really liked the part that gives a distinction from synthesizing and summarizing. I feel like the two concepts are generally thought to be very similar if not that same. The examples given where they show how they synthesis information and how they organized it in a paragraph that was easy to understand was very helpful when it was my turn to do the same in the reading. The examples given show two synthesis and one of the them being the stronger one, I liked how they showed what you should do and what you should avoid. The synthesis pdf was probably the most compete guide on how to write a synthesis. They give a step by step on how to organize the information and what questions to ask yourself while reading the material. The organizing the essay section was very informative because it gave me a table to use ti organize what I wanted to say and what was important to get across. The Norton field guide reading of chapter 50 was very complete. It gave me several examples that were synthesing the information correctly. I went back to read some of the synthesis examples and tried to compare them to mine.

Work cited:

Kozol, Jonathan, and Deborah Bertsch. “Fremont High School.” The Norton Field Guide to Writing, W. W. Norton & Company, New York, 2022

classmate 2 posting

First Posting

With two separate articles, about the education system between America and Finland they both say the same thing, being that Americas education system has flaws within. In American, the education is explained as very much a competition according to Anu Partanen author of “Finland’s School Success”. In her article she talks about the success of Finland’s education compared to America. She explains the education system in Finland and how they have reformed it, to better the education for the students as well as those in universities. One thing she says is, “It’s hard to think of a more un-American idea, but when it comes to education, Finland’s success shows that the Finnish attitude might have merits.” In a different article called,” Fremont High School” by Jonathan Kozol he talks about a school in Los Angeles which is overcrowded and the “perimeter protected by an eight-foot steel fence topped by spikes.” Kozol describes the school as he talks with both students and teachers, both saying the same thing, being that their school has many flaws. He mentions a student who mentions the bathroom issues in their school. Kozol says,” Of the limited number of bathrooms that are working in the school, “only one or two… are open and unlocked for girls to use.”” He talks about the lack of classes for students who want to further their education in a specific career direction and how students are forced into services classes which means they just help the teacher with errands and passing out papers to the class. In Partanen’s article she says, “Everyone agrees the United States needs to improve its education system dramatically”. While Kozol talks about a question he was asked by one of the students on why the students who do not need help get so much more than those who need it get less.

Works Cited

Anu, Partanten. Finland’s School Success: What Americans Keep Ignoring. The Norton Field Guide to Writing, 2011

Jonathan, Kozol. Fremont High School. The Norton Field Guide to Writing, 2005

Readings

One source that helped me was the “Synthesizing Sources Purdue Writing Lab”. In this source I was able to this helped me to focus on what kind of synthesis I would write with the articles above. In this reading it helped me to find the relationship between sources and to draw conclusions. The next to help me with writing my post was “Synthesis”. Here it helped me organize my paragraph by making a statement and giving summaries of each article. I was able to write in depth summaries of both articles. I talked about both articles and how they were similar in the fact that they both knew that America education system needs to be revised. The last reading to help me in writing this post was in the Norton Field Guide pg. 519-525. Here I learned about the connections and patterns between the articles and the best way to write it in my paragraph. In this reading it says, “You may find that identifying connections among your sources is easier if you examine them together rather than reading them one by one.” I was able to take this advice and flip between both articles and find the similarities and connections to write this post.